Hi Vuni, I really liked how your reflection was very descriptive and you told us about how the fireworks were shooting towards the cars, next time you could check on your spelling mistakes but besides that you did a great job! Keep up the good work!
That beginning was awesome, such as that alliteration. I agree on the feedback Sene provided to you, so next time make sure to re-read your work then edit before publishing. I love the reflection (And that Alliteration)
Hi Vuni, I really liked how your reflection was very descriptive and you told us about how the fireworks were shooting towards the cars, next time you could check on your spelling mistakes but besides that you did a great job! Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHey Vuni , you need to work on your punctuation a little near the end and at the start . It was great but work how you do your sentences
ReplyDeleteKia ora Vuni.
ReplyDeleteThat beginning was awesome, such as that alliteration. I agree on the feedback Sene provided to you, so next time make sure to re-read your work then edit before publishing.
I love the reflection (And that Alliteration)
Keep up the awesome blogging!!